2.25.2011

Several poems

Hello, y'all

I have to submit a one-sentence poem for my AP Literature class, for a contest. I would like to know, which one of these one-sentence poems do you prefer. Your opinions, votes, and constructive criticism please.

The hedgehog is safe
but he cannot hug,
While the rabbit loves freely,
and watches her children die
and die
and die.

So much for depressing poem number one.
Here is semi-depressing poem number two.

I gamble my heart at a casino called love,
where the rich bring their diamonds,
the strong bring their clubs,
and the spades dig the graves of those fools, much like me, who had only their hearts;

outside, the abstainers call us all enslaved,
and yet I have no diamonds,
and I have no clubs,
but I hold to the hope that I will find a love, before spade comes to bury my bankrupt old soul.

Last one.

Eyes ablaze,
the revolutionary youth and life and spirit march to meet the status quo in glorious battle;
Eyes of glaze,
they're dead.

So yes, most of these are depressing. Don't ask. I just came up with them on the spot. They reflect nothing of my character or current mood...I think. So your comments please. Thanks!

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